1/22/2021 110 Comments PROMPT 5THE PROMPT: "The Hero Dying For the Villain?"THE RULES:
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110 Comments
Sharpiz A
1/22/2021 04:10:20 pm
Crimson blood oozed out of his chest. His hoarse rash breaths signaling his last moments. My body buzzed with numbness as I collapsed onto my knees next to Jabari.
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Adrika Mondal
1/22/2021 05:04:34 pm
Sharpiz, your story drew the emotions in a wonderful way! I'm captivated by your descriptions and dialogue.
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Heather Rose
1/26/2021 01:23:57 pm
Ooooh, very nice!!!
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2/4/2021 05:22:15 pm
"He....deserved...so much better."
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Eden W.
1/22/2021 06:11:02 pm
"I can't believe you'd think of coming here!" I stood by, watching as Arley berated Burne. "My brother is dead because of what you did! Don't even come in. We don't want you to profane the holy chapel!" Barely containing the urge to strike Burne, Arley turned on his heel, and stomped inside.
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Nicole Kaiser
1/23/2021 07:48:48 am
Wow!! This is such a great story! I love the emotion and description you put into this story the the line, 'Hating is easy. Forgiveness? That's legendary.' I love how she wanted to condemn Burne as well, but didn't because of what Bartholomew (love the name) told her. There is so much character growth by you just writing that. I really want to know more about this Bartholomew character ;), he sounds like a great person!! Keep up the great work!
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Jasmine B
1/23/2021 03:12:18 pm
'Hating is easy. Forgiveness? That's legendary.' I love this! It is such a true statement, and the way you worded it is remarkable. You do such a great job at showing so much character development in very little words. Great writing!
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Adrika Mondal
1/23/2021 05:45:51 pm
"Hating is easy. Forgiveness? That's legendary.' He would want me to tell you this." These lines are golden! So clever work. Loved it
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Heather Rose
1/26/2021 01:25:14 pm
Oh, wow! I agree with everyone else, I love that line!!!
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2/4/2021 05:23:44 pm
"Hating is easy. Forgiveness? That's legendary."
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Eden W.
2/4/2021 08:35:14 pm
Thanks!💕 I used my six word story from the first round.
Bethani Theresa
1/22/2021 07:44:46 pm
There were once two brothers--the older loved by all and the younger loved by none, the one destroying and the other mending.
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Nicole Kaiser
1/23/2021 07:50:50 am
I love this story!! The use of two brothers (one loved and one not) was beautiful and well written! You can see how much the older brother loves the younger brother. It is a really beautiful story! Keep up the great work!
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Eden W.
1/24/2021 07:06:35 pm
Life is full of sacrifices made for the ones we love. Though you have lived for chaos, I have never stopped loving you."
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Heather Rose
1/26/2021 01:25:43 pm
Oohhh, I love it ;-;
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2/4/2021 05:26:00 pm
I love your use of brothers, Bethani!!! (stories about siblings are the best <333).
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He wore a circus coat and stood at the end of the ring. Trapeze artists swung above his head. The weeks old licorice sold around him. All the while, he waited for the moment when everything around him would catch like a film reel; when the flashing lights and popcorn heat would fade away without a warning and he would disappear with it.
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Eden W.
1/23/2021 09:14:05 am
I really like the idea of a ghost circus. And the line about missing persons, that gave me shivers. It's freaky good!
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Adrika Mondal
1/23/2021 05:43:27 pm
I enjoyed the setting of the story so much! Ghost circus seems scary as well as exciting. Good work<3
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Rachel Leitch
1/25/2021 04:16:59 am
Very intriguing!
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1/25/2021 10:42:45 am
Love it! The idea is super unique and the writing style is fantastic! Great work. <3
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Heather Rose
1/26/2021 01:26:39 pm
Woaaahhh, this one is so unique!!!! I love the idea!!!
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Nicole Kaiser
1/23/2021 09:25:29 am
Who would have thought the hero would be dying for the villian?
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Eden W.
1/23/2021 10:55:29 am
Oh my gosh!!! does he die? I really want more. The last two lines hold such truth though! You never know what will happen when you fight for good against the evil. I love how it took his pain for the other to be set free. This is so amazing!
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Jasmine B
1/23/2021 05:20:44 pm
I love this! You do a great job of showing the past of both characters with the limited words. I love the self sacrifice aspect you brought into it. The connection of the characters is phenomenal. Overall I love everything about this story! Keep up the amazing writing!
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1/23/2021 05:50:01 pm
This had so emotions! I wanted to know more. You did such a great job with the characters.
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Heather Rose
1/26/2021 01:27:09 pm
Ahhh!! I love it!!!
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Joshua Kaiser
1/27/2021 08:30:20 am
Awesome story! Once again, you did an awesome job managing your words! You told the whole story of the girl's life in 150 words, and it wasn't rushed. And you told most of the story of the boy, made it so that we know how it ends. Finally someone doesn't leave me on a cliff hanger. I love your character development! 2/4/2021 05:28:33 pm
THAT. ENDING.
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Jasmine B
1/23/2021 12:09:54 pm
"Alarik!" I scream as he falls to the ground in front of me. I drop to my knees next to him. Blood has begun staining his shirt. What have I done? This was never meant to happen. I place my arm underneath his head, pulling him close to my chest. "Alarik, please, talk to me." My voice is desperate and broken. Tears are streaming down my face.
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Eden W.
1/23/2021 12:15:20 pm
Gasp. Its getting really hard to to read these stories. They are all so descriptive. Everyone makes the moment so precious and sad. Especially you. A brother that dies for a sister. This is so heavy but so sweet. Great job!
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Nicole Kaiser
1/23/2021 02:06:11 pm
This is so amazing! You did such an amazing job writing it is felt like I was there. I also loved how you used the method of a brother and a sister. You describe the characters and their past extremely well for nor having very much words to write! It was very organized and easy to read. You make people feel what the characters are feeling and I already love the brotherly love the Alarik shows to Scarlett! It makes me want to meet them both and hear both of their stories. I also like how you didn't use the prompt word for word, but showed it through the story and their actions. Keep up the great work!
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Grace
1/24/2021 10:55:17 pm
This is so good! Knowing my own siblings, this story touched me most of all. Good job!
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Heather Rose
1/26/2021 01:27:36 pm
This is heartbreaking, great job!!!
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2/4/2021 05:30:53 pm
"Because you're my sister."
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Rachel Leitch
1/25/2021 04:15:26 am
Dear Captain Teahan,
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Nicole Kaiser
1/25/2021 07:52:13 am
I love that you used a ship story this time! Extremely creative! Also, great job with writing the Villain. It made me so mad that he kicked the hero's father and his father risked his own life to save the capitan!
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Rachel Leitch
1/30/2021 12:37:36 pm
Aw, thank you! I'm honored!
Jasmine B
1/25/2021 09:01:52 am
Fantastic creativity, using a letter to tell the story! The villains arrogance is maddening! You did a wonderful job showing each characters personality! Really great writing and very outside the box, I absolutely loved it.
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Rachel Leitch
1/30/2021 12:38:20 pm
Thank you-- I love playing with different things in writing! Glad you enjoyed it!
Heather Rose
1/26/2021 01:28:35 pm
YOURS IS MY PERSONAL FAVORITE
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Rachel Leitch
1/30/2021 12:39:23 pm
Thank you so much, Heather! That means a lot! *wishes I could make a movie appear out of nowhere for you*
Rachel Leitch
1/30/2021 12:39:48 pm
Thanks!
Grace W.
1/26/2021 05:09:33 pm
I love this so much as Heather said it is absolutely my personal favorite so far!
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Rachel Leitch
1/30/2021 12:40:16 pm
Thank you so much! I am very honored. 1/26/2021 11:51:25 pm
You are very creative. The letter format was very exciting.
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Rachel Leitch
1/30/2021 12:40:50 pm
Thank you! It was a format I'd been wanting to play with, and flash fiction seems to be a good place to do that! 2/4/2021 05:33:53 pm
Rachel!!! Your story is so EPICLY awesome!!! It gave me serious Pirates of the Caribbean vibes. The way you wove the tale, and the MC's voice is natural and hooking. (I NEED A NOVEL OF IT, seriously!)
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Rachel Leitch
2/5/2021 08:09:11 am
Aw, thank you! I'm honored! I really enjoyed writing it and playing with the voice. And I agree, someday I may have to turn it into a novel ... That happens to a lot of my flash fiction ...
Elizabeth Holden
1/25/2021 08:45:47 am
I love how you wrote this and this villain... oooo he deserves whatever is coming for him! Amazing!
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Rachel Leitch
1/30/2021 12:41:25 pm
Now I need to decide whatever is coming for him . . . Thank you so much!
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1/25/2021 10:38:11 am
Ash from the funeral fires swirled around the two overlooked bodies, yet alive.
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Eden W.
1/25/2021 12:07:43 pm
Oh JEEZ! I got chills reading this!
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Eden W.
1/25/2021 08:31:08 pm
Ok, sorry. I wanted to make my previous comment longer, but I had to go somewhere, so now I'm back to finish 🤣 1/26/2021 09:12:34 am
Oh, wow! That means a whole ton to me! Thank you kindly. :)) I'm glad, and somewhat surprised, that you found it kinda relatable! You are a dear. <3
Eden W.
1/27/2021 09:32:31 am
I think it means a lot to me because, I hate to admit it, but I don't like to admit I was wrong. I can see the struggle as he wants to harden his heart, but still can't. I just think this it totally a line that would apply to me in some situations.
Heather Rose
1/26/2021 01:29:28 pm
Ahh, spectacular!!!
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2/4/2021 05:37:02 pm
I love the direction you took this prompt! Your story was so vivid, I could see the soldiers on the ashen ground, the general breathing his last, while the younger tries to push away the 'good' he doesn't want to admit is in him.
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Elizabeth Holden
1/25/2021 02:28:16 pm
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1/25/2021 02:39:48 pm
Woah woah WOAH. This is amazing! And totally unexpected! You took a whole new perspective for this prompt, and it is t e r r i f i c!
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Heather Rose
1/26/2021 01:30:01 pm
Oooooooooooooh OoO
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Nicole Kaiser
1/26/2021 02:11:57 pm
This is so amazing!!!! I love the whole story!! I really want to know more!! Great descriptions and great job writing the characters! You really caught my attention with this new way for writing the prompt. Keep up the great work!
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Grace W.
1/26/2021 05:14:53 pm
love love love the dramatic turnaround at the end that is just epic!!!!
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1/26/2021 11:49:19 pm
WOW! I kept wanting more...the descriptions were vivid as well. Enjoyed it!!
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Rachel Leitch
1/30/2021 12:42:23 pm
Ooh . . . I really like this! So very intriguing! It's a unique way of looking at the prompt.
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2/4/2021 06:38:44 pm
OH MY GOODNESS, I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!!!
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Heather Rose
1/26/2021 01:23:10 pm
“My lord, will you be coming out for dinner?”
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1/26/2021 01:33:52 pm
I love how you wrote this *not* in the moment, but rather the villain remembering it. It's quite original. :)
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Nicole Kaiser
1/26/2021 02:34:19 pm
I love that you wrote this story from the Villain's point of view! It is really cool to see that side of things and you can really see the inner turmoil in this character! Great job and Keep up the great work!
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Grace W.
1/26/2021 05:16:41 pm
Ok as others have said this is really original! I like that it bothers the villain and how matter-of-factly he recalls the event.
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Jasmine B
1/26/2021 05:25:24 pm
I love the inner turmoil the villain is experiencing. The route you took with this is amazing! Great work!
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1/26/2021 11:47:38 pm
The villain's POV was so unique. I LOVED it so much! the agitation which Zevan was undergoing is totally an unique way to use the prompt. This is my favourite.
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Elizabeth Holden
1/27/2021 12:27:31 am
Ooooooo!! The internal struggle! I love the angst and you really get a sense of the villain's character.
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2/4/2021 06:39:39 pm
Ooooh, I loved seeing from the villain's pov!
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I had died. Time and again, I was put to death for my countrymen. My fierce loyalty was a stone on my shoulders, a stone I would give anything to carry.
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Jasmine B
1/26/2021 05:32:17 pm
WOW!! I don't know what to say. This is really great! The mystery and suspense is fantastic! Great work!
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Eden W.
1/26/2021 08:46:46 pm
I think this prompt was the best because it really lets people put their hearts into their stories. You defidently did that. This is amazing!
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Heather Rose
1/26/2021 11:26:29 pm
Woah, I love it!!! O.O
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Elizabeth Holden
1/27/2021 12:29:41 am
This is amazing! The plot twist at the end... BRILLIANT! I love the opening line as well - it really grabbed my attention! Super writing!
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2/4/2021 06:41:11 pm
Woah! Well done!!! (Your first sentence is SO epic)
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Joshua Kaiser
1/26/2021 09:29:19 pm
“Crucify!”
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Heather Rose
1/26/2021 11:27:07 pm
Oh, I love this one!!! Definitely unique, and the ending!!! O.O
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1/26/2021 11:41:05 pm
This was so intriguing, the ending was...just so unnique. Keep up!
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Jasmine B
1/27/2021 05:52:45 am
This is amazing! I love that you used a real life hero dying for villains. Really fantastic writing!
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Nicole Kaiser
1/27/2021 06:50:15 am
This is an amazing story! I love love love that you used the event of Jesus dying on the cross! Because he did truly die and rise again to save we Villains from our sins. Great job with descriptions and writing down the sign that was in front of him. You did a great job with writing the character and i want to know his past and why he thought he could take on four Roman soldiers! Keep up the great work!
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1/28/2021 05:26:03 pm
I applaud you for writing this! Lol, just shortly after I posted my own story, the idea to write about Jesus popped into my head, and I'm glad somebody else took it up! Jesus is the ultimate Hero.
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Grace W.
1/30/2021 01:05:50 pm
When I first read the prompt my mind immediately went here, also! I'm glad others made the same connection, that's super encouraging.
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Rachel Leitch
2/3/2021 12:08:26 pm
This is brilliant! I love it!
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2/4/2021 06:45:56 pm
Awesome choice of story! Jesus is THE BEST "hero dying for the villain" that has ever been told.
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1/30/2021 08:02:45 am
*is dying a slow and painful death of suspense* Juliaaaa where are youuu.
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Grace W.
1/30/2021 01:04:42 pm
Same *determinedly puts on most patient demeaner while dying on the inside*
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Eden W
1/31/2021 06:26:11 pm
I want to know who wins but I don't want this to end...
Rachel Leitch
2/4/2021 12:07:02 pm
* excitedly waiting*
Julia (TWG Host)
2/4/2021 05:16:47 pm
*slinks in* well well well.... it looks like everyone comments a whole lot more when I make y'all wait XD lol
Joshua Kaiser
2/1/2021 08:02:15 am
Guess I should have said this earlier, so sorry. This story is inspired by John 17- John 21, Luke 22- Luke 24, Mark 14- Mark 16, Matthew 26- Matthew 28. I wish I had enough words to write the whole story, but I had to settle for this. For people who haven't heard the whole story, it is already written for you in these Bible passages. I did the best I could to try and stay accurate to the true story. And the last sentence is inspired by Revelation 19: 11-16.
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2/3/2021 08:01:12 pm
Flora’s eyes crept behind her room’s golden walls, the orbs of candlelight dancing across the hall.
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Adrika Mondal
2/3/2021 08:14:13 pm
You once again did a great job with descriptions. This was exciting. Using darkness was a creative approach indeed. It had sweetness along with creeping darkness. It mingled well and gave the story a new flavour.
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Shreya Ganguly
2/4/2021 05:59:36 am
Thank you so much Adrika. Your comments mean a lot to me. I had so much fun writing this story. 2/4/2021 06:50:39 pm
Oooh *shudders* I love how you wove "darkness" through your story! I so need to know more!
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